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Hollow!!!111
#1
The RP

I'd like a bit of C&C. It's the first time I've ever tried something so... dark.

I hope I pulled it off. Whaddya think?
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#2
*emocut*
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"It's on my brain, driving me insane.  It's on my mind, all of
the time, and if it left... I would be fine.
"
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#3
Yeah, great. C&C that doesn't suck would be welcome, too. Tongue
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#4
Hey now, that's perfectly constructive. You just have to read between the lines.

Obviously, I meant your RP was dark enough not only to drive me into starting an emophage DJ, but also starting cutting myself.
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"It's on my brain, driving me insane.  It's on my mind, all of
the time, and if it left... I would be fine.
"
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#5
=O that was dark, good job.

I like how she's lost and confused, but at the same time, so sure of herself. She seems fragile and strong at the same time...I actually felt bad for her.

Keep it up, seriously, that's a side that I've never seen written before, or at least, written well.
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#6
Thanks, dude.

Much obliged.
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#7
This is something of a different side of Bra, and yet you still remain very grounded in the character you've established. She is incredibly manic, the kind that makes you step back and say, 'Whoa.'

While it may be dark like you say, it's a completely legitimate reaction to the things that have happened. I like the carry-over you keep using of Raditzu's behavior rubbing off on Bra, and she keeps correcting herself. It's a slow integration of change, but a funny one.

In summation, a good read as always. Way to work the empathy factor.
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_=So wake me when it's through
I don't want to feel the things that you do
Don't worry, I'll be fine
I just don't want this dream, wake me up inside=_
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#8
Wow. Awesome. Thanks very much, Bar.
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