C & C on this thread

[Jinpo]

Can we get C & C on this thread

It is my first rp in a while . . .

[Ander]

I started from your first post. I didn't really like how you had so much control over Silver. He may have been comfortable with it, but I would have preferred if you'd kept it from Cargo's angle, rather than behind the eyes of Silver as well. It took away from your character, a lot.

It was interesting how you met Silver via dream. A little corny, but at least it wasn't all 'Who are you?' 'I'm Silver.' 'I'm Cargo.' 'Yargh, let's go on a killing rampage.' 'Okay!' It provided some element of confrontation, because Cargo isn't entirely sure about this guy before he even meets him.