09-01-2009, 11:42 PM
this is just a sample could you tell me if it sounds good then ill post the rest and you can reject it or accept it.
Sitting on the cold, rough, rocky cliff looking down on a small village with no more than 4 dozen people in it, Zader sat. He wondered if his brother was down there waiting for the chance to strike down innocent people. He kept thinking to himself, the last time he fought his brother he was left for dead, but he knew that this time he was stronger. Just then he smelt a Smoke tinge in the air, then he heard a high pitched scream. At that moment he jumped off the cliff and down into the village.
Sitting on the cold, rough, rocky cliff looking down on a small village with no more than 4 dozen people in it, Zader sat. He wondered if his brother was down there waiting for the chance to strike down innocent people. He kept thinking to himself, the last time he fought his brother he was left for dead, but he knew that this time he was stronger. Just then he smelt a Smoke tinge in the air, then he heard a high pitched scream. At that moment he jumped off the cliff and down into the village.