C&C On my RP

[Ander]

Not bad for something that wasn't typed in Word, although the program would have fixed a lot of your more simple errors, such as missing letters from a word and forgetting to put quotation marks in. The post I looked at was pretty true to what I call a typical DBZ "filler" episode, in which there is nothing but monologues. While these are helpful in providing background information and an insight into a character's thought process, try and limit that as much as you can. Nobody likes to read a post with a bunch of talking. Something that a lot of Japanese films try to do is get across as much as they can with as little words as possible.

Other than the usual things I could say (fix misspellings, grammatical errors, etc., etc.), it wasn't all that bad. Try to cut down the monologues a little, is all.