PCIII Official C&C

[Vejita I]

Originally posted by Krillin
KV, it felt as though you were trying too hard to make a good post. I don't know if that's just your natural style or what, but the description was definitely over-the-top. I know I have a stylistic preference much different than most, but if the only glimpse we get of you individuality as a writer has to be seen between the bars of tedious description, than we don't really get a feel for you. What's more, the reader might get bored.

That said, your description is phenomenal. I think, however, instead of using it to the degree that you do, you should instead select only a few details that convey the scene you're trying to create, and leave the reader to imagine the rest.

But, again, that's just me. I tend to use very little description as it is. =p

http://cdbzrpg.dracondev.com/forum/threa...post272984

I actually did try too hard. In respect to Bido, I felt he deserved me "stepping it up" a notch. I've been taking it easy up until that post. But yeah, thanks.

Sorry for spamming you ho's thread. I'll skidattle =D