[C&C] Victoria

[Victoria]

Just wanted to make a thread, if anyone reads my rp...http://www.cdbzrpg.com/forum/showthread....post521345 any feedback is appreciated!

So far i'm happy with it.

[Ashe]

Hey, moved the thread into the Character Feedback forum.

And I'd give feedback myself, but really don't have the time to at the moment. Hopefully you'll hear from someone soon if they aren't all tied up with DA

[Alexander Trafford]

I'll give you some input after another post. That will let me get a better fell for your character.

[Victoria]

Yay I posted again, I'm really having fun.

[Alexander Trafford]

I'm on the case!

P.S. I think your Combat Ability should be something like 565, and not 65, since 500 is the starting value. You should harass someone about that.

[Vad]

I'm on the case!

P.S. I think your Combat Ability should be something like 565, and not 65, since 500 is the starting value. You should harass someone about that.

Correct. I will get someone to hop on that.

[Victoria]

I know it's been a while but I added another post, and if anyone did or still wants to read my story and tell me how it is that would be awesome!

[Cain]

It's amazing how you portray Victoria. Parks is quite a character, too, as well as Jeremy. You know what you're doing, and you do it well.

[Victoria]

Thanks so much for the input, feels nice to know someone's reading my story .

[Cain]

Do you study the metering of speech? You use it in your writing. :-D

[Victoria]

No, is that a bad thing?

[Cain]

Not at all. Just figured you had.

[Victoria]

I just wrote a post that has added a lot to Victoria's story/background, in case anyone was still reading or curious .

[Vad]

I really enjoy Victoria. I also really enjoy the story you're spinning in Catching Stars. I read the entire thread in one sitting yesterday and it left me in awe. You have a way with description that conveys the mood of the characters and/or scene very well. I found myself becoming sad along with Jeremy, or frustrated along with Victoria (for two examples).

Back to Vic; I think she's a great character. She's fierce, spunky, and almost childish. You make all of her qualities, not only those, blend together and it's amazing. Having not read any of your previous work I can only say that I like the direction you're taking her in. You've stated you enjoy her a lot and it shows.

*thumbs up*

[Victoria]

thanks! This chapter is going to be pretty bad ass, although it'll be longer and have some more filler than my last one, i hope the ending goes as I plan it to.

I appreciate you input.

I'mma finish your rps tonight

[Victoria]

I'd love any more feedback anyone would like to give. In particular, my last RP. Although I feel I lack details, descriptions, I'm going to try adding to that soon enough.

[Jesper]

Like you said to me, my opinion is basically worthless since you already know that I think you're awesome, but since you graced my thread with your opinion, the least I can do is return the favor.

Have I mentioned, by the way, that I'm glad you've found your muse with this character? Seeing such devotion towards a story and cast of characters is great to see, and it's kind of inspiring in a way. Don't let that get to your head, though. >=/

Juuuust kidding.

The results of your work ought to have made it all worth it, because you have something great going. I don't like gushing over things, but your story is well-crafted and original (which should garner a collective gasp from the typical reader/movie-goer, because new ideas are few and far in between). It's filled with mature themes and dances on this fine line between light-heartedness and a dark storyline that kind of unsettles me at points. The Drug, for instance, kind of creeps me out, and it's the cause of a lot of drama, particularly towards the beginning of your plot on Chubbs.

Your writing has improved steadily since I've began reading your work, and you've become well-rounded in your skills. Grammar and spelling are, for the most part, top-notch because of the amount of work you put in editing. Not a whole lot more to say, really--you could stand to vary your word choice just a little bit, but then again, it's diverse enough as it is. Besides, me saying that is like the pot calling the kettle black. xD

Like I've told you before, I like the characters you've developed, objectively. Subjectively, I hate Jeremy with a passion, and I'm looking forward to him dying some sort of painful death. Nothing more to say here, either. Your cast of characters is great.

Some quick feedback on your last post: ITwas pretty solid, I thought. It utilized a sort of dark humor, which is effective in further explaining the change Victoria has gone through. The end was interesting too, but just because it's telling of space adventures to come.

I'll stop now, you probably don't need me tooting your horn any more than I have.