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BJs Throne of Honesty - Belle Hibiki - 05-17-2006
I'd ask for opinions on my sign up, but I think I already know the reaction.
'Wtf?'
BJs Throne of Honesty - Banned Dana - 05-17-2006
Wouldn't mind getting a bit on my first Football post in the Park thread. Looking forward to starting some more action today.
BJs Throne of Honesty - Kirano - 05-17-2006
Quote:Originally posted by Olibu
*Sigh* It was worth a try, look at my spar with Kilah, thanks.
I could have sworn it was supposed to be a 3 -way. Ah never mind I have something planned.
Edit: Since I posted in this thread I might as well do the how was my hotel scene post? BJ.
BJs Throne of Honesty - Toshiro - 05-17-2006
Quote:Originally posted by Burter Jr
I liked it. Good development, good length. I like Gohan's teenager personality (in that he's always thinking about fucking girls). It's cool watching him deveop a crush, kinda like he's arguing with the little devil and angel on his shoulder.
Good roleplay
It's actully his darker side. I thank PoP:TTT for this idea of having the two voices in his head. Dark Prince and good Prince. But thanks man, it all helps in the long run.
BJs Throne of Honesty - Burter Jr - 05-17-2006
Closed till I finish those who asked
BJs Throne of Honesty - Burter Jr - 05-17-2006
Olibu:
Eh, it was okay. The huge paragraphs threw me off and I skimmed the fighting. Sorry.
Kid Buu:
I'm normally all for randomness, but that was just stupid. I didn't follow a damn thing that happened. I hope that's not how you usually write.
Nezi:
Good description, but that's pretty much all it was. Description.
13:
I liked it. Had enough description to give me a picture of the scene, enough character for me to know relate to 13's actions, and enough humor to amuse me.
The ending like, with Puukin, was gold
BJs Throne of Honesty - Burter Jr - 05-17-2006
Olibu, my bad
BJs Throne of Honesty - Raditzu - 05-17-2006
Do me, do me, do me!
BJs Throne of Honesty - Burter Jr - 05-17-2006
Which one?
BJs Throne of Honesty - Raditzu - 05-17-2006
Sign up. I only posted that second one cause you yelled at me.
='(
Meanie.
BJs Throne of Honesty - Burter Jr - 05-17-2006
I liked it. Excellent stuff. I was a little confused as to why Rad was in such a tired and bad mood at the start, but aside from that, it made me smile, usual.
I'm boycotting this thread until people give me feedback in RPG Discussion =(
BJs Throne of Honesty - Yamu - 05-17-2006
Post more and we'll have something to critique...
Edit: Just saw that you posted another...you couldn't have done that before I gave C&C?
BJs Throne of Honesty - Burter Jr - 05-17-2006
I did. Loser =o
BJs Throne of Honesty - Spencinator - 05-18-2006
I'd like some C&C about my post in the Park aswell. I know it's not really long, I try to make it long, but with spacing and stuff, it gets small. Though I do try to be clear with my writing.
BJs Throne of Honesty - Jewtastic - 05-18-2006
My last post. its in the Resturant. Tell me what you think...and be harsh.
BJs Throne of Honesty - Old Captain Silver - 05-18-2006
My post in the park.
Here
BJs Throne of Honesty - Burter Jr - 05-18-2006
Closed till I get to these
BJs Throne of Honesty - Super Buu - 05-18-2006
Edit: Shit, didn't see the closure. It's still there if you like, though.
If you like, you can C&C this post. It's the first decent one I've managed to get up for DA.
BJs Throne of Honesty - Hellfighter 17 - 05-22-2006
Let's start over!
BJs Throne of Honesty - Burter Jr - 05-22-2006
It's still closed