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"Mary Sue" - Super Buu - 04-01-2009
Props on the sig, btw.
"Mary Sue" - Kami - 04-01-2009
Thanks.
"Mary Sue" - Juno - 04-01-2009
http://www.katfeete.net/writing/marysue.html
Juno is only a little like you. He isn't really very cool: he blends into crowds, he hangs out on the fringes at parties, and wearing shades after dark makes him run into things. He may have sometimes thought that he was special, or destined for greater things, but probably dismissed the idea as a fantasy. He's had more than his fair share of hard knocks, and probably spends more time than he ought moaning about it. And you've been sparing with the free handouts: whatever he gains, he's worked for.
In general, you care deeply about Juno, but you're smart enough to let him stand on his own, without burdening him with your personal fantasies or propping him up with idealization and over-dramatization. Juno is a healthy character with a promising career ahead of him.
Score Breakdown
I Love Him, I Let Him Go 5
You Mean Plaid Is Out? 7
I'm Destined For What? 6
Angst R Us 11
Spare the Rod and Spoil the Child 4
Total: 33
"Mary Sue" - John Doe - 04-01-2009
Score Breakdown
Do I Know This Guy? 3
You Mean Plaid Is Out? 5
I'm Destined For What? 6
Can't Complain 3
Spare the Rod and Spoil the Child 4
Total: 21
"Mary Sue" - Kaden - 04-01-2009
I'm following the same rules for the last test as I am for this one. For example, yeah our characters have crazy super powers compared to real people, but they're relatively mundane in the established universe.
"Mary Sue" - Juno - 04-01-2009
I still checked it b/c it specified 'psychic powers', and psychic powers aren't normal.
"Mary Sue" - Kaden - 04-01-2009
I wouldn't call psychic powers "unique" or even particularly out of the norm for DBZ.
Quote:Kaden is only a little like you. He isn't really very cool: he blends into crowds, he hangs out on the fringes at parties, and wearing shades after dark makes him run into things. He may have sometimes thought that he was special, or destined for greater things, but probably dismissed the idea as a fantasy. He's come in for his share of hurt, but gotten off with minor damage. And he's gotten no slack from you.
In general, you care deeply about Kaden, but you're smart enough to let him stand on his own, without burdening him with your personal fantasies or propping him up with idealization and over-dramatization. Kaden is a healthy character with a promising career ahead of him.
Score Breakdown
I Love Him, I Let Him Go 7
You Mean Plaid Is Out? 4
I'm Destined For What? 3
Can't Complain 3
Momma HATES Him! 0
Total: 17
"Mary Sue" - Juno - 04-01-2009
By "psychic powers" I was generalizing possession, mainly.
"Mary Sue" - Kaden - 04-01-2009
Hahahahahaha!
The irony of that is just delicious.
"Mary Sue" - Kazuya - 04-01-2009
Kazuya is only a little like you. She may be popular, or she may not, but no matter what she's impossible to ignore; she stands out... just the way you always wanted to. She always knew she was special, destined for great things - and probablyf made sure everyone else knew it too. She's come in for her share of hurt, but gotten off with minor damage. And you've been sparing with the free handouts: whatever she gains, she's worked for.
In general, you care deeply about Kazuya, but you're smart enough to let her stand on her own, without burdening her with your personal fantasies or propping her up with idealization and over-dramatization. Kazuya is a healthy character with a promising career ahead of her.
Score Breakdown
I Love Her, I Let Her Go 5
Yo! 11
Hey, Wanna See My Crown-Shaped Birthmark? 13
Can't Complain 6
Spare the Rod and Spoil the Child 4
Total: 39
"Mary Sue" - Pinky - 04-01-2009
Quote:Rod Hardwood is nothing like you. He is not at all cool; in fact, he thinks cool is a temperature reading, and when he says "Oh, I just put on whatever old thing's lying around," he means "on the floor, where I threw it last night - but I turned the underwear inside out first." He may have sometimes thought that he was special, or destined for greater things, but probably dismissed the idea as a fantasy. He's come in for his share of hurt, but gotten off with minor damage. And he's gotten no slack from you.Wow, that was pretty fukin accurate.
In general, you've kept yourself a goodly distance from Rod Hardwood and given him plenty of room - maybe a little too much. Don't distance yourself so far from Rod Hardwood that you stop caring what happens to him.
Score Breakdown
Do I Know This Guy? 3
He's The Anti-Cool 0
I'm Destined For What? 4
Can't Complain 4
Momma HATES Him! 0
Total: 11
"Mary Sue" - Super Buu - 04-01-2009
Rose is nothing like you. She isn't really very cool: she blends into crowds, she hangs out on the fringes at parties, and wearing shades after dark makes her run into things. She may have sometimes thought that she was special, or destined for greater things, but probably dismissed the idea as a fantasy. She's got no emotional scars to speak of. And you've been sparing with the free handouts: whatever she gains, she's worked for.
In general, you care deeply about Rose, but you're smart enough to let her stand on her own, without burdening her with your personal fantasies or propping her up with idealization and over-dramatization. Rose is a healthy character with a promising career ahead of her.
Score Breakdown
Do I Know This Guy? 2
You Mean Plaid Is Out? 6
I'm Destined For What? 4
Healthy as a Horse 0
Spare the Rod and Spoil the Child 4
Total: 16
I think this test's a lot better at measuring true Mary-Sueness. Though my scores would probably go up over time since Rose will do more silly heroic shit as time goes on.
"Mary Sue" - Sage - 04-01-2009
As Kaden, I'm following the 'it's DBZ so magic and shit's no big deal' rule:
Sage is only a little like you. She isn't really very cool: she blends into crowds, she hangs out on the fringes at parties, and wearing shades after dark makes her run into things. She may have sometimes thought that she was special, or destined for greater things, but probably dismissed the idea as a fantasy. She's had more than her fair share of hard knocks, and probably spends more time than she ought moaning about it. And she's gotten no slack from you.
In general, you care deeply about Sage, but you're smart enough to let her stand on her own, without burdening her with your personal fantasies or propping her up with idealization and over-dramatization. Sage is a healthy character with a promising career ahead of her.
I Love Her, I Let Her Go 4
You Mean Plaid Is Out? 9
I'm Destined For What? 3
Angst R Us 11
Momma HATES Her! 0 -- This one I'm confused about because I never once answered 'yes' to anything that might be construed as parental abuse but whatever
Total: 27
"Mary Sue" - Super Buu - 04-01-2009
I followed the whole "everyone in DBZ has powers rule" too, forgot to mention.
"Mary Sue" - Alura - 04-01-2009
Alura is only a little like you. She isn't really very cool: she blends into crowds, she hangs out on the fringes at parties, and wearing shades after dark makes her run into things. She always knew she was special, destined for great things - and probablyf made sure everyone else knew it too. She's had more than her fair share of hard knocks, and probably spends more time than she ought moaning about it. And you've been sparing with the free handouts: whatever she gains, she's worked for.
You may have let yourself get a little too close to Alura. Maybe she's you as you wish you were, or maybe you're just afraid no one will like her and are trying to give her a free ride. Have some confidence in your writing! Alura is a good character. Give her room to be herself before you stifle her.
Score Breakdown
I Love Her, I Let Her Go 6
You Mean Plaid Is Out? 8
Hey, Wanna See My Crown-Shaped Birthmark? 14
Angst R Us 18
Spare the Rod and Spoil the Child 12
Total: 58
"Mary Sue" - Piper Juunanagou - 04-01-2009
Piper is only a little like you. She isn't really very cool: she blends into crowds, she hangs out on the fringes at parties, and wearing shades after dark makes her run into things. She may have sometimes thought that she was special, or destined for greater things, but probably dismissed the idea as a fantasy. She's had a rough life - to say the least! Angst? Histronics? Her speciality. And you've been sparing with the free handouts: whatever she gains, she's worked for.
In general, you care deeply about Piper, but you're smart enough to let her stand on her own, without burdening her with your personal fantasies or propping her up with idealization and over-dramatization. Piper is a healthy character with a promising career ahead of her.
Score Breakdown
I Love Her, I Let Her Go 6
You Mean Plaid Is Out? 4
I'm Destined For What? 4
Valium Poster Child 22
Spare the Rod and Spoil the Child 4
Total: 40
Silly Piper and her fucked up, dystopian upbringing.
"Mary Sue" - Kaden - 04-01-2009
"Hey, wanna see my crown-shaped birthmark?" is easily my favorite so far.
"Mary Sue" - Juno - 04-01-2009
Kaden Wrote:"Hey, wanna see my crown-shaped birthmark?" is easily my favorite so far.Nah, "Valium Poster Child" is the best.
"Mary Sue" - Jack - 04-02-2009
Bil Baer Jaxx isn't a character: he's you, or you as you'd like to be. He is so impossibly hip that he has difficulty seeing over his own pelvis; he'll probably die young, but damn, will it have been a good life. He always knew he was special, destined for great things - and probablyf made sure everyone else knew it too. He's had more than his fair share of hard knocks, and probably spends more time than he ought moaning about it. And you've been sparing with the free handouts: whatever he gains, he's worked for.
You may have let yourself get a little too close to Bil Baer Jaxx. Maybe he's you as you wish you were, or maybe you're just afraid no one will like him and are trying to give him a free ride. Have some confidence in your writing! Bil Baer Jaxx is a good character. Give him room to be himself before you stifle him.
Score Breakdown
Mirror, Mirror 27
James Dean, James Dean... 29
Hey, Wanna See My Crown-Shaped Birthmark? 12
Angst R Us 13
Spare the Rod and Spoil the Child 6
Total: 87
Wow.
"Mary Sue" - Vad - 04-02-2009
Vad is suspiciously similar to you as you'd like to be. He isn't really very cool: he blends into crowds, he hangs out on the fringes at parties, and wearing shades after dark makes him run into things. He may have sometimes thought that he was special, or destined for greater things, but probably dismissed the idea as a fantasy. He's had more than his fair share of hard knocks, and probably spends more time than he ought moaning about it. And you've been sparing with the free handouts: whatever he gains, he's worked for.
In general, you care deeply about Vad, but you're smart enough to let him stand on his own, without burdening him with your personal fantasies or propping him up with idealization and over-dramatization. Vad is a healthy character with a promising career ahead of him.
Score Breakdown
He's Got My Nose 11
You Mean Plaid Is Out? 7
I'm Destined For What? 7
Angst R Us 10
Spare the Rod and Spoil the Child 5
Total: 40
This is cool!