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Ack - OldCell - 05-09-2007
Ouch. I was just wondering if anyone had any tips for me, since a couple of people apparently disapprove of my writing. Granted, I'm pretty bad at the fighting style of this rpg, but if anyone has tips, lemme know please, 'cuz from 10 to 6 in two votes means those were some low scores.
Ack - Blue - 05-09-2007
A 6.67 is nothing to scoff at. The best roleplayer on this site by that grade, last I checked, only had like an 8.9. I would wait until you drop below 5 atleast before you worry about that.
Also, you might wanna post a link to your work, so people can just go straight to it from here.
Ack - Blue - 05-09-2007
Double post for some C&C. Take this not as harsh criticism, but a desire to point out some small things I noticed.
Firstly, I noticed that while some of your posts are of a nice length, most seem short and a bit rushed. Which further shows in the grammar errors I picked up in my reading. My advice would be to re-read what you write atleast once and mull over each sentence in your head to think about how you could make it better. Quality over quantity and all that jazz.
Next, you use the name of your character a bit much. While it's not bad grammar or nothing, when I read your stuff I became distracted by reading that over and over again. Try using descriptive... uh, stuff to describe Cell instead of using his name. Like: "the bug-like creature" , "the bio-android" , "Gero's creation" (if you're going that route) , "Horror Perfected" would also work, if you wanted to. It helps draw the reader into your story when you avoid repetition.
Lastly, you might want to consider avoiding using canon characters in your roleplays, even if no one is currently playing them. If someone does join as, say, 13, and they don't want to have had that meeting with you, it'll be awkward to work it out where you two never met, or something like that.
Ack - OldCell - 05-17-2007
Okay, thank you much. As for the Android 13 thing there was a 13 for a couple days, and he was in it, then got banned, so I just rp'ed him out. *shrugs* I'll try to be a little more creative with my name, too. Again, thank you.
Ack - Alura - 05-17-2007
If you mean the rating on the profiles, nobody rates by writing
Ack - OldCell - 05-17-2007
What do you mean?
Ack - Alura - 05-17-2007
Well, the rating is on the user itself, not on their writing. While I'll admit it should be on writing, nobody can sit down and read every roleplay on the website.
So don't fret if someone is a jackass and rates you low. It's not because they think you're a bad writer, they're just being a dick
Ack - OldCell - 05-17-2007
Aaah, popularity contest, gotcha. I'm not the kind to win those, so I won't sweat it. Thanks.
Ack - Kazuya - 05-17-2007
Quote:Originally posted by Burter
If you mean the rating on the profiles, nobody rates by writing
<.< I rate by writing. That's what I Thought it was there for.