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Please? - Sullivan - 12-24-2007
I'd like some C&C on my latest work, if there's anyone not to busy to give it. I was trying to establish a tone of hopelessness in the opening, so it'd be nice to know if I did that well, at least. Or even if I tried to hard at it. xD
http://cdbzrpg.com/forum/showthread.php?p=444748#post444748
That's the link. I've been rusting up, I think, so it'll be nice to get some critique so I can fine tune my writing.