+- CDBZ Archive (http://alex.zulenka.com)
+-- Forum: Out of Character Forums (http://alex.zulenka.com/forumdisplay.php?fid=8)
+--- Forum: RPG Discussion (http://alex.zulenka.com/forumdisplay.php?fid=125)
+--- Thread: You know you want to (/showthread.php?tid=12108)
You know you want to - Kaden - 01-31-2008
http://www.cdbzrpg.com/forum/showthread.php?t=23316
Looking for some criticism before the WMAT really kicks off. Its been a while since I've sat down and written consecutive posts as Rad, so I'm hoping there's not too much rust that needs breaking off.
Any feedback is appreciated.
You know you want to - Aqua - 01-31-2008
I like your posts. I hadn't read a ton of your work prior to this tournament, and I'm really looking forward to watching you interact with some semi-decent competition. Stylistically, I like your creativity. When describing physical confrontation, you can get a little choppy. What I mean by that is, the casual flow of Raditzu when he's talking or being a smartass seems interrupted when he decides to fight. 17 does a great job of carrying over his nonchalant attitude into combat, if you need a reference.
Obviously, you're a great writer but I had to give you something to work with.
You know you want to - Kaden - 01-31-2008
Thanks!
I'll definitely keep that in mind while I write my upcoming posts.