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Rusty McOxidized - Hellfighter 17 - 05-06-2008
"Titular Reference to Work Within" is my first time writing in over a year, so I think I have grown quite rusty.
I am trying out some new things. First of all, when you read it, know that it is supposed to appear messed up, and that I am not just on an acid trip and think I am Dostoevsky. These things include surrealism, magic realism, and playing with the narrator (not sure what that is called!). I have also gained quite the interest in philosophy and theology, so I'll probably be trying to convey that with God.
Frankly, I am trying to go for humourous writing, and if I fail, I am failing hard. I don't think there is much middle ground. Sure, some won't find it funny, but the average person should or I should just write reclusively for a while.
Criticize me on whatever. There are only two posts so far, nearly making a trifle two-thousand words, but I hope this is a good enough introduction for you to get an idea of how I plan to write. I hope to be a frequent writer, so expect me to bump this every now and then. Your help with whatever, from structure to grammar to ideas, will be considered carefully. Thanks in advance.
Rusty McOxidized - Orion - 05-08-2008
To be quite honest, as I started to read, I was prepared to give you rather negative criticism.
As I read on, however, my interest was piqued. But piqued in a way that this is so strange and a logician's nightmare that I couldn't look away.
Let me start by saying if you're going with some sort of mental illness or impairment on Seventeen's part, you're doing well. I have a tendency to put what I read into a frame so I can better understand it, so to understand your writing at all, I needed to label it as a psychotic episode.
Apart from that, it's ... interesting. It's certainly not coherent, but at the same time, I'm compelled to watch this thread to see how it turns out. Mostly due to its original take and freshness of writing, assuming you do have a purpose and aren't just writing jibberish. It's quite adventurous, and I hope it works. So far, I think I need more to go on before I could critique it in more depth.
Also, what is with the emphasis you put on the word 'man' in your work? I saw a speel from the narrator about it, but then I didn't understand the significance of its bolding/underlining/etc.