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Trying to join - Android-18 - 11-25-2005
hildagarn is not allowed kthx
Trying to join - Hellfighter 17 - 11-25-2005
Yea. We also need three starting moves from yo, though, and a better RP sample. Your sentences are way too bland; "He finally found what he was looking for." This could be spiced up using adjectives to describe schtuff and describing how he was at this moment. Also, you can describe the setting, and so forth. I'[m not saying every sentence should be uber long, but they should be better than that. I hoep it doesn't sound liek I'm ragging on you, I'm merely trying to help yea. Here is an example of a beautiful RP, and I suggest reading it; you could pick up soem things from it. I'm not saying I expect you to be able to do something like that, but look to it for help/inspiration.
Trying to join - Android-18 - 11-25-2005
omgs usde paragraphs PLEASE
Trying to join - Reijin - 11-25-2005
Quote:Originally posted by Android-18
omgs usde paragraphs PLEASE
Erm... She's been drinking? -_-" Anyways, yeah, please seperate the roleplay into paragraphs. Look at some of the accepted roleplays and the stickied threads to get an idea
Trying to join - Android-18 - 11-25-2005
to me the rp looks good, but you'll need a new character.
Trying to join - Android-18 - 11-25-2005
Yes that might be good, start new, don't ju8sd repoost the old RP,. write a new one.
Trying to join - Android-18 - 11-25-2005
thits never about statrs, rp your heart out, be yourself. RP as the character oiyou're joining as , and shine, be who you are, be as good as you are. Do;'t be so hasty to join, we'll be here.
Trying to join - Android-18 - 11-25-2005
I';m sorry, I'm currently drunk, but I thought it was good and I think you are fgood, but a more stab;le mod can say more. Don't give up, nevere give upo.
Trying to join - Android-18 - 11-25-2005
but it gives you practice doesnt it? wrie somehig fun, isnt it fun to write? thatsd what this is about, let yourseld go!
Trying to join - Burter Jr - 11-25-2005
I'm sorry to override you Eighteen, but I'm going to have to.
Register as Sauzaa and I'll activate you. I apologize.