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Fun with words - Android-18 - 12-03-2004
Please comment O_o.
A warning ignored
?Tis but a day, where up in a heavel
Lo?! T?was but a shallow teebel
Low brumble and brook lay astraught
To gallow footed Gobs in trot
?Hoy!? a forgel figure bade
?One ought naught often wade,
?Tis but the collied of night.?
A fuggled Gob felt sudden fright.
?Oi ye old trot, shog with you.?
Imply loided the leading lew
??Fore I cut thy ragoid noddle,
waggle thy tongue, troth and fobble.?
?Thou hast made a grave mistake.?
Ne?er a curse that she could fake
?Sessa! Vile malapert wight,?
loured her voice with sudden delight
One by one the tots did poffy
O?er muttled though shambled tofty
Down brumble brook that lay astraught
Not-a-one flew a tumly strot
O?re the cleff the creatures fell
Met well with the Gawpher Twell
Harbered beast of dreaded teeth
One by one the gobs would seeth.
Smote and torn, the Gawpher fed
Slaughtered Gob lay strewn in red
Fond tots left dead to farce
The hoggled witch bayed with tarse
?A shoyful fate for the lub of them.?
Into the night she grumbled of lym
?Oi! ?Tis but a tiddle try.?
And off she went, by-the-by.
Fun with words - Hellfighter 17 - 12-03-2004
That made me want to commit mass genocide, It is a gerat play on words, I could never do that, but I hate that people use dto speak like that. >.<
Fun with words - Ander - 12-03-2004
Very good. Not many people could string together such a poem. The meaning was so much more deeper than the words displayed. I'm not good at commenting on poetry, but I liked it very much.
Fun with words - Android-18 - 12-03-2004
Lol I never do this but it's an assigment for creative writing class. I was inspired by: http://home.earthlink.net/~lfdean/carroll/jabberwock.html
Fun with words - Ander - 12-03-2004
Quote:Originally posted by Android-18
Lol I never do this but it's an assigment for creative writing class. I was inspired by: http://home.earthlink.net/~lfdean/carroll/jabberwock.html
Ah, I remember the good ol' Jabberwocky. He was always a different thing to everyone, and talked really funny.
Fun with words - Rem-13 - 12-03-2004
Ialways liee jabberwock poem AND I really enjoyed yours, the only thing I didnt like was the last line. Just doesnt sound right, but its otherwise awsome. I suggest reading it aloud.
Fun with words - Android-18 - 12-03-2004
What about the last line didn't you like? I had a hard time ending the poem, so go ahead and pick at it.
Fun with words - Hellfighter 17 - 12-03-2004
If you don't become a artist 18, I'll commit mass genocide.
Fun with words - Rem-13 - 12-03-2004
I... I dont know. The last sentence...it just doesnt tickle my tounge like the rest of it. *shrugs* *laughs at his lame explaination*
Fun with words - Ander - 12-03-2004
Just the "by-the-by" part. What about it is incidental or secondary?
Fun with words - Android-18 - 12-03-2004
o.o...I thought it sounded cool ^_^...
how about:
?A shoyful fate for the lub of them.?
Into the night she grumbled of lym
?Oi! ?Tis but a tiddle try.?
And off she went with a subtle sigh.