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Talon Holmes... the not screwed up thread lol - Talon Holmes - 03-17-2008
Name: Talon John Holmes (simply called Talon or Holmes by most)
Race: Saiyan
Starting Planet:Earth
Fighting Style: Tactical Unorthodox, Deductive Aggression
Short Bio: Talon crash landed in the Atlas Village at the age of four in the home of "the old man" and "old woman". Sent to either destroy the Earth in general or (more likely) the village specifically at age four he was defeated by "the old man" in combat. Talon was then adopted by the old couple and was trained by the old man in his ways. Know he works as a consulting detective much like his adopted father did centuries ago. His loyalty now is to the Atlas Village and his adopted parents in particular and Earth in general having rejected almost all aspects of his Saiyan Heritage.
General Description: Talon stands at 5'10" and weights 195lbs. He has tanned white skin and cuts his black hair in human fashions, predominantly having it cut short to the point where you can't tell that most of his hair sticks straight up. He dresses himself in human fashions of the time. A tattoo of the symbol of the Atlas Village (a picture of Atlas holding up the Earth) is tattooed on his right shoulder. He always has one of his pipes on hand as well a box of matches and pipe tobacco.
He has a tendency to wear old fashion clothing such as a fedora hat when wearing a suit, and a smoking jacket well he is resting/ studying in the evening.
Starting Moves: Art of the Shadow Doppelganger: Stolen right from the Naruto Universe this is the "Shadow Clone Jutsu". Like the Narutoverse technique this skill divides up Talon's KI as he divides up his clones. Talon predominantly uses it well on investigations to be in more then one place at a time. Once all clones are destroyed but the original or all recombine Talon knows every they experienced. On the battlefield Talon has used this skill in order to confuse his enemy, fight more then one person at a time, or as a diversion in order to retreat.
Mind Altering Eye Technique: Another technique used to confuse and alter his opponents mental aspects and grips. Using his KI Talon alters certain aspects of his opponents perception of reality, by affect certain aspect of his opponents brain. This skill allows him to make his opponent believe that he is perceiving and sensing something that he is not. Developed in the Atlas Village as a torture device, Talon uses it mostly as a way to either scare of weaker opponents or as a way to break down his opponents mental drive and willpower. The technique ultimately uses either images stored within his opponents mind for Talon's use (ie making them relieve a traumatic part of there life) or by implanting thoughts and images from Talon's mind (ie making his opponent think Talon is someone else or has become a Super Saiyan. Or that the ground has become water.) The bad side to this is that it takes Talon's complete concentration and can only be used in "one on one" combat basically useless beyond that. It also takes a considerable amount of KI to keep the illusions going.
Its used by Talon looking directly into his opponents eyes which then locks his opponent in the technique. The move can either be broken by his opponent superior power level, Talon's lack of energy, or outside environmental aspects(whether that be someone attacking either Talon or the person under the spell. Or perhaps the smell, touch, taste, or smell of something that is important and close to the individuals heart.)
The Age of Reason: A KI blast similar to the Special Beam Cannon. Talon places his right index and middle finger on the center of his skull. He then concentrates KI energy in his fingers pulling it directly from his body. He then release the blast against his opponet in a large red blast which looks similar to the Kamehameha wave or the Final Flash wave. The strength of the move depends upon how much KI Talon is willing to place into the skill. Obviously a larger blast takes more time to draw in compared to a smaller blast.
Lightening Blast: Talon alters his KI so it resembles the electric impulses in the body that send information between cells. He then increases the watts, amperage, and power of these bolts and sends them into his opponents body from his fingertips. If to much power is used in the technique the blue bolts will tear into the air around both Talon and his opponet creating a large "thunder" sound which causes ear damage to both Talon and his opponet (as well as those to close to both of them) unless ear protection is worn. For this reason predominantly Talon rarely uses it unless he is prepared to protect his hearing, or he only plans on using weaker elements of the skill.
Before the "thunder" stage is reached the bolts make a "zapping" sound. When striking a opponet it has the same affect as a lightening style technique although the skill itself is a increase and alteration of the bodies natural "electric" impulses instead of a altering and use of the environment's electron properties.
This skill like many of Talon's was also used predominately;y as a torture device although it can also be used to kill a opponet like any KI blast if used correctly.
Increased Sense: Using his KI Talon increases the ability of his senses. Causing a great increase in his ability to see, hear, smell, taste, and feel. This allows him to see things up close and at farther distances then normal as long as his KI flow continues. It works the same way with his other senses (think of how Superman can hear, and see at great distances ectra. Instead of it being a genetic talent though Talon's is based on the amount of KI he is willing to use). This skill again Talon uses predominantly in his investigation.
Role-play Sample: (This is going to be part of a upcoming roleplay known as "The Case of the Namek Boy")
A long black limo slowed down as and finally stopped as it came up to the large wooden gate of the Atlas Village. The driver dressed in the traditional grab of a chauffeur quickly scrambled to grab the paper work in the seat next to him as an impatient guard waited for him. As other guards slowly started walking around the parked car the chauffeur hands the guard a leather bounded folder which has the image of Planet Earth on it to the less then pleased guardsman.
The man quickly grabbed the folder with a bit of disgust on his face as he opened it and looked at the documents inside. He quickly flipped through the pages and then turned towards one of the guardsman standing next to the back rear door and nodded his head.
As he did the guardsman knocked on the door and with a booming voice that almost demanded respect just by the pitch barked out his orders.
"Alright everyone out know. You have ten seconds to exit the limo or it will be promptly destroyed along with each and every one of you."
Soon both doors on each side of the rear limo swung open and six individuals poured out from each side. Four men dressed all in black suits, wearing glasses. A young woman in a formal dress with black puffs under her eyes obviously from crying. Along with one adult Namek dressed in very formal garb, a pure white turban long white cape and long white pants and shirt.
All of them where quickly pushed together along with the chauffeur as a dozen guards dressed in what appeared to the limo riders as outrageous outfits of a strange ancient origin quickly surrounded them. The woman started breathing heavier as her right hand instantly reached for the nameks. The namek grabbed onto her hand and gave her a encouraging squeeze as he lightly smiled towards her.
"Gentleman remove your sunglasses know!" The man from earlier barked out as the men quickly removed them allowing there eyes and face to be perfectly viewed.
On of the twelve men then stepped a bit forward and stared these visitors down a bit. The woman instinctively ran her right hand threw her long blond hair as he blue eyes looked downwards towards the ground.
The original guardsman then walked through the ring of twelve with the leather folder opened further. As he did he walked towards the tallest man in black. He eyes then rose from the folder and looked up with a nonchalant look on his face at the tall clean cut looking man.
"Agent Procter of the Earth government. You are here on the request of your supposed world government in order to ask the services of one of us Atlassian's when it comes to this missing persons case is that correct?"
Procter perhaps unknowingly stood up a bit straighter with his chest puffed out a bit more then before almost instinctly. "Yes sir. We are here to see the Beekeeper."
The guardsman smirked lightly and almost laughed at the idea as he looked up directly into Agent Procter's eyes. "You people are pathetic. World government my ass. Anytime you people honestly need something done you come to us. You can't even find a Namekian child without the aid of our Village yet pretend to speak for us on the world and universal stage if I had my way all of you would..."
"That's ENOUGH Rache do your job or you will be fired and we will find someone who can correctly do it." One of the men behind Rache barked out. This ones voice was different from the one before the woman noticed as she lifted her eyes and looked at the man who barked it out. The man was well built with long blond hair and blue eyes wearing a very strange ancient looking garb like the rest of the guardsman.
Rache simply bowed his head downwards slightly as then turned back towards Agent Procter. "I highly doubt that the Beekeeper will be interested in taking on your case Procter. There hasn't been a mystery that has interested enough to cause him to leave this village in decades. And I highly doubt your missing boy case is going to be enough to get the old man's desires up."
"Oh please sir." the woman weakly spoke up as a few tears feel from her eyes. "Please Kiro needs your help desperately. Please we will give you anything to have his safe return."
Rache sharply turned to the woman and screamed at the top of his longs "Silence woman! You have not been addressed and therefor have no right to speak yet. Neither the Atlas Village or any of her citizens has decided to hear your mission and until we have you must be silent. Especially a government dog like yourself."
The woman's head slowly lowered again almost like a turtles as she started pulling herself back closer into the arms of the Namekian next to her. As she did though a man walked ran over to Rache and whispered something into his ears.
Rache's eyes widened as he whispered something back at the man. He then lightly cleared his voice and turned towards Agent Procter. "You government pigs are very lucky. The Queen Bee has allowed your pass to there home to speak with her husband." Rache was then handed a small map. Rache walked over and handed it to the chauffeur and then looked over the whole crowd and barked out his orders like a rottweiler. "You are allowed passage to 221b Beedrive to the Holmes Mansion but no where else is your limo allowed to go unless the case is accepted by the Beekeeper or Queen Bee unless sponsored by another civilian."
With that Rache turned his back on the group as a few of the guardsman split apart opening the circle up and giving the group a path back to there limo. The chauffeur quickly got back into the driver seat as the passengers once again got into there seats.
As the door shut behind them the group gave out a collective exhale and Procter pulled a handkerchief out of his pocket and whipped the sweet from his forehead.
"God every time we do that I can barely keep my composure." Procter then pulled out a small flask from his inside jacket pocket and took a swig of the whiskey inside of it in what seemed to be a attempt to calm his nerves.
Procter then extended the flask in the direction of each of his fellow travels but all turned him down. As he did the blond haired woman turned toward her Namekian friend.
"Do you think he will help us find Kiro?" she said with desperation in her voice.
The Namekian's eyes swelled up a bit with tears as he looked into the woman's eyes. "I don't Sarah." He then paused a bit and inhaled as he turned his head towards the black tinted window. "I just don't know."
Character Profile
Answer the following questions quickly. Often your first thought will be the best. Don’t try to describe a person you already have in mind. The purpose is to discover a new personality.
2. How old is your character? 28
3. What is the color of hair? Saiyan Black
Eyes? Brown
Skin? Tanned Caucasian
5. Describe the character’s voice and any favorite words or expressions. Calm but a bit sarcastic in demeanor. His accent would be described as a "American". He uses alot of his "adopted fathers" sayings at time. Such as "The game is Afoot." "Elementary".
8. What is the character’s general attitude toward life? People are individual beings with individual rights to live there life as they see fit. People have a right to be idiots and make mistakes and it isn't his or anyone's job to help people from themselves. He is very individualistic like most from the Atlas Village. He has a hatred for all forms of tyranny and for individuals who try to bind a individuals heart, mind, or soul into bondage.
9. What sort of family does your character come from? He is from a elite Saiyan family although he has come to reject them and know consider himself a part of his adopted father and mother's family. Who are in my mind anyways the DBZ's reality (a pastiche) of Sherlock Holmes and Irene Alder although both are centuries old having the same longevity as Master Roshi does in the main DBZ storyline.
10. Name and briefly describe friends and acquaintances of your character. He has his adopted parents and most of the Atlas Village as people he cares for. He also has a bit of a womanizing trend like most saiyans (which is one of the few differences between him and his adopted father) and has meet many woman and "outsiders". He also knows many "Earth Agents" that have come to him for help and because of his former service with them.
11. Where was the character born? Vegeta. Sent to Earth at age four and has remained there defending it ever since.
12. Where does the character live? At his home in the Atlas Village although he can occasionally be found at his parents mansion which isn't far away from his own home.
Strength = 75
Constitution = 75
Agility = 65
Insight = 215
Technique = 75
Willpower = 75
Talon Holmes... the not screwed up thread lol - Kirano - 03-17-2008
We don't allow naruto based techniques. And even if it were allowed, you'd need body split for the Art of the Shadow Doppelganger. RP sample's decent looking.
Talon Holmes... the not screwed up thread lol - Waffuru - 03-17-2008
Yeah, you might need body split for that one but we can deal with it next.
I'm going to activate your account so go ahead and start posting.