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C&C on RP - Belle Hibiki - 01-04-2006
New here and still working on my writing. Can anyone give me any critiques and/or comments on my Personal Roleplay "Reemergence" taking place on Earth?
Much appreciated,
-Napster
C&C on RP - Belle Hibiki - 01-17-2006
Bump to the hizzouse. Although I'm not Nappa any more, any feedback would be very welcome!
Also, any of my posts in The Red Stallions are up for review, although Kid Buu certainly doesn't have the internal conflict that Nappa did. At least, not yet.
C&C on RP - Belle Hibiki - 01-23-2006
Bump.
C&C on RP - Kazuya - 01-25-2006
You are so articulate in your posts, especially with a limited dialogue for your character. Nice protrayal! (and this isn't asskissing because we''re roomies, either.
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C&C on RP - Super Buu - 02-13-2006
Veni Vidi Vici
Oh my god.
First off I'm a fan of this because it adds some colourful backstory to Bibidi, who's a major character in SB's life. I love the concept behind it, of 'wizarding rivals' and such. What makes it beautiful is the execution. I can easily say that you're one of the best, if not the best writer on this site. The humour behind the writing is genius, it taps into the juvenile, giggling kid in me. KB's inner thought is also done brilliantly, such as this line:
"Rrrr..." Great, he thought. Just what he needed, another stupid challenge. Choosing not to reflect on the fact that it was he himself who had asked for it in the first place, the childlike warrior glowered at Vici.
Criticism: I don't like coloured speech
You also tripped up sometimes, though that's more to do with not checking over as much as you should - something I'm often guilty of. Things like using 'Buu' 3 times in a row.Other people: Read this stuff. I really enjoyed it, the humour keeps you reading whilst there's a very catchy plot underneath. This guy is severely under-hyped.
C&C on RP - Belle Hibiki - 02-13-2006
/flatter'd
I did use Buu three times in a row? Damn... I usually try to avoid that, but there's only so many times you can say 'THE MAJIN WARRIOR'/'the childlike fighter'/'the pink floppy wonder' etc before you start running out of synonyms (sp?).
Anyway, don't expect that kind of humor in every post. I was... I don't know what I was on that day, but it's not often I try to interject humor into my posts. That being said, you can be sure that there will be plenty of WANG jokes in the future... Even if it's in poor taste!
C&C on RP - Belle Hibiki - 03-04-2006
BUMPing, because Veni Vidi Vici is coming to a close.
How are people enjoying it, or are you at all? Is it good? Does it suck? Has the writing (as I suspect lately) gotten fairly bland? Are there too many typos to bear with? Can you not wait for it to end?!
I know I can't.
Thanks in advance!
C&C on RP - Super Buu - 03-06-2006
Just read the last two posts ... for most of it I was howling with laughter, this being my favourite paragraph:
Quote:Originally posted by Kid Buu
With every 'hunka' Buu thrust his hips out, his body erupting into violent flames that leapt from the guitar and sheathed his form in the holiest of unholy wreathes, so irreversibly badass that he might as well have called himself metal Kid Buu and had bitchin' razors slapped onto his fists, because that's what fucking awesome people did. He brought down his hands like a deathblow on Vice, his whole mind focused on his swan song.
XD
After I finished reading though, I didn't know whether to laugh or to cry. I almost wanted there to be a happy ending, for Vici to come back, but she's dead, and it was almost like back when I was a kid playing Zelda: ALTTP - "Marin isn't real?! Wtf! This game sucks!". Absolutely awe-inspiring. I'm proud to have you as my doppelganger.
