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King Kai Quests - Piper Juunanagou - 07-25-2006
Well I've been getting slower lately with the writing, so I figured I'd ask for some C&C while I wait for the juices to flow and free time to arise. Please? Anyone care to read over any of my King Kai Quests? I don't ask you read them all (there's only 3 of them, so someone with time could be able to if they were bored...)
Anyway, if you want to read one, go ahead, I'd enjoy some input. Thanks to anyone with the time to read some of my work. =)
Quest 1
Quest 2
Quest 3 (in progress...)
King Kai Quests - Ander - 07-25-2006
Quest 1: When you said "fiddlesticks," I immediately envisioned Seventeen in glasses and high waters. Cracked me up. And Hellfighter was right. The joke was kind of lame. =/
Quest 2: Ahahahaha!! You played off your lame joke. High five, man. You blended stiff description (and by stiff I mean eloquent) with humor. Good job.
Quest 3: Great start.
Your writing has always greatly impressed me. A-plusu.
King Kai Quests - Piper Juunanagou - 07-25-2006
Thanks for reading it all Bardock, I always enjoy your input, and for the record, I did make the joke lame on purpose. Seventeen was just never the type of dude who was purely funny. His humor is all about dry wit and sarcasm, not much in the field of stand-up though.
Anyone else interested in reading my work? It's not that many posts, despite being spread out across 3 quests.