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When You Wish... - Belle Hibiki - 11-07-2006
It might be a little early to ask for critiques after one post and all, but I thought that I should get it started anyway.
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Myself, I felt like I was trying too hard to stretch it out, and I have no idea if the beginning "grabbed" anyone. So yeah. What do you guys think?
When You Wish... - Super Buu - 11-07-2006
Damn you, I was trying to save reading this for some far-off indulgence. Now I'm going to be antsy until you write the next post. </Subliminal messaging>
As always, my favourite part is the brilliant narration. It manages to keep the story interesting without being obstructive (as I, among others, have often done, by adding gigantic paragraphs of narration). In terms of the story, there's not much to comment on yet, but it's certainly piqued my curiosity. You've really set things up and got people salivating for the second post. Gud jaerb.
Now I have but one thing to say: more plz
When You Wish... - Belle Hibiki - 11-14-2006
*HeadBUMP*
When You Wish... - Belle Hibiki - 12-05-2006
RARRRRRRRRRGH *bump*
When You Wish... - Juno - 06-06-2008
Belle, do you still have this? I've been reading around the site and I want to read it, but I can't seem to find it.
When You Wish... - Piper Juunanagou - 06-06-2008
http://www.cdbzrpg.com/forum/showthread.php?t=17461
First page of the Outer Space forum =X
When You Wish... - Juno - 06-06-2008
Oh XD
When You Wish... - Belle Hibiki - 06-06-2008
I wouldn't really bother reading it. I sort of lost the inspiration somewhere in the middle and stopped.
It was gonna be epic, though.
When You Wish... - Juno - 06-06-2008
Oh. Uh. Okay then.