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My recent fight - Dehan - 12-01-2006
8/10. darn near perfect bub.
My recent fight - Jonathan Meer - 12-01-2006
Overall: Poor. I'll be straight up honest, the roleplays I read are on the lower spectrum of the Chubbs scale. Everything I read just felt unnatural and amateurish. I very much have to disagree with Turles' 8/10, as that is far too inflated. A 3/10 would be closer.
The main issue is your style. Right now, it's unnatural. I don't know you very well as a writer, but I'm going to guess it's because you do not have a lot of experience writing, and thus do not have a prominent voice that you write it. Your posts are also chock full of grammar mistakes, and this brings the grade down severely. I recommend a grammar course, and constant practice.
My recent fight - Dehan - 12-03-2006
I was actually judging the spar overall. If I were judging only on his writing/posts I'd give it a 4/10. Both did pretty good, I liked Nappas more than his, hence the 8/10 for the spar.
Edito: for the 4/10 G.J It's basically what Krillin said. I know you'll do better next time clone.