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Any thoughts on my first rp? - Old Dende - 12-05-2006
Just wanted to see if anyone had any thoughts on my first few parts of my rp, and if anyone would be willing to give any helpful pointers.
Any thoughts on my first rp? - Shun - 12-05-2006
Thoughts of the Past
You should give a link. I'll C-N-C later.
Any thoughts on my first rp? - Old Dende - 12-06-2006
Ok, here is the link... Thoughts of the Past.
Any thoughts on my first rp? - Downy Peach - 12-07-2006
I don't like the dashes, you'd think it would help with reading it, but it doesn't. There's really no need for a double paragraph in there either, just the one will suffice. I think you're also using the elipses too often.
Sorry I can't assist with much more then that, but it's enough to ease the eyes a little when reading it. Though that's personal preference on whether or not you would want to keep those in. I read the rest and as far as content goes, it's good