03-20-2005, 03:51 AM
You should of used a different word for "placid" the second time it was used. At the beginning it kind of sounds like mixing colours to have new pnes, but then you make it sound like they are dfifferent eyes. If you add more, I bet it would be better.
"We're just two lost souls swimming in a fish bowl."
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