Jibba Jabba

[Jonathan Meer]

How's my writing faring? I've noticed a distinct change in my style; haven't read Adams in a good year-and-a-half, and I've lately been doing a small amount of "orthodox" writing (the stuff of short stories and such). Is this change for the better or worse?

http://www.cdbzrpg.com/forum/showthread.php?t=23155

[Kaden]

I have two versions of my C&C. The first is significantly more detailed, while the second is condensed for ease of reading. Here is the first:

Your first post seemed a bit disjointed to me, but the second one was spot-on. On what, I'm not sure, but spot-on nonetheless.

Your sense of humor seems to have changed pretty dramatically from the last thing of yours I read -- though that could just be me. Much drier and understated. The first word I wanted to use was "underhanded" but I'm not sure that's quite right.

Anyway, I very much like that you took an otherwise mundane quest a put a, for lack of a better phrase, refreshingly random spin on it. Of all the things I would have guessed -- evil organizations, plots to overthrow the government, jealous kindergarten rival -- for people to do with a quest like that, a flip-book documentary is very left field.

And the second:

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[Jonathan Meer]

Your sense of humor seems to have changed pretty dramatically from the last thing of yours I read -- though that could just be me. Much drier and understated.

No, I think you're right. I've noticed that, as I'm writing (in the two very short examples), that, though I recognize I am attempting at humor, I'm not quite making it as plain. Before, I put odd things on a pedestal, dressed them up with foliage, and made quirkiness plain. Almost as if I cut a slice of randomness out and plopped it in some mashed potatoes. But now, I seem to be weaving things throughout; some are a bit more plain than others, but its all threadwork.

Thanks for the feedback Raddy.