10-25-2009, 02:38 AM
So I'm normally pretty content with how I'm writing, but since it's been a LONG while and I might be a bit rusty, I thought maybe I could get some feedback on my first RP.
http://www.cdbzrpg.com/forum/showthread....post519300
It's not long, and nothing really happens because I'm trying to first get a real feel for the character, but I want to know if it's interesting or if you start reading it and you're like "meh who cares about this n00b." It might not be indicative of future RPs since they're not all gonna be about the character history, but I figure I could get some criticism on the language used, paragraph structure, etc.
http://www.cdbzrpg.com/forum/showthread....post519300
It's not long, and nothing really happens because I'm trying to first get a real feel for the character, but I want to know if it's interesting or if you start reading it and you're like "meh who cares about this n00b." It might not be indicative of future RPs since they're not all gonna be about the character history, but I figure I could get some criticism on the language used, paragraph structure, etc.
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