Input?

[Mal Nova]

http://cdbzrpg.dracondev.com/forum/threa...age=2&sid=



Well... I'm having some slight doubt right now.
I know how I am wanting to created Retane, and such, but in the end.. meh.

How about some C&C on the character himself and some C&C on the last2-3 of my RP's?

[Ander]

Why, why, why did you have to go bad? =(

Can't we have some decent good guys in here who aren't fucked up?! X(

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Okay! =D

Oh my god you're a masochist. Good, in depth description of the whole tearing off the arm thing. It gives you that squirmy kind of feeling, like you're actually watching it happen. Ugh. But if I had the ability to regenerate, I'd mess around with it too.

You have kind of a shift focus thing going on. It goes from main plot to history of regeneration to main plot to actual regeneration to main plot again. This is not necessarily a bad thing. You give enough information to chew on while not straying too far from the actual point of things. Character depiction remains consistent; he's a hateful little thing.

Is there a specific something you are trying to get across?

Also, I strongly suggest you use or download Word.

[Mal Nova]

Nothing specific I was looking for.

We'll except I feel I'm lacking detail in somethings... that or lack of vocabulary. Not sure what.

The switching to main story.. to regeneration thing, we'll.. I try to look at it as what Retane sees and feels and thinks. Kind of my style.



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I use to play the good guy as GJ and Pikkon. This is something different.


Retane isn't exactly in the whole good guy/bad guy thing. He wouldn't care if you were good or bad.

He is there for the adventure. If he's not getting it, he's going to go else where to get it. He dislikes Charango and Placo... for.. well.. the reasons that were stated.

THat also made me laugh whenI tohught about it... cuz the only way I could train with them was agaisnt them and as interesting as that sounds... and probably would be a first... it don't seem right. So... No power ups for good ol' Retane. =D

I'm using the Tokens quest to build Retane where I want him.

Oh! And if you think the arm scene was graphic... well...>_><_< Someones going to hate me whenI get to Earth. I'm going extremly sick whenI get there. It might answer... 'How far will Retane go to complete a mission?"

Before Monday, I have to kick it into high gear. Got to do a few more things. I'll be glad to get off of Namek though. No night time makes me want to use Shadow blanket.. but well ... doesn't seem as interesting...


S'pose to meet up with Nail tomorrow again.. would be fun to see how I feel about this one. After all.. Retane aint fond of anyone really. He's more of a ... 'if it'll help the mission then it'll work' kind of guy.

If I wanted to go to the bad guy thing.. I could but meh. lol plenty of RPing possibilities left =)