02-18-2009, 02:04 AM
I have yet to read your latest post - which I assume includes Selena - but I have read up to you just having met her. I intend on getting caught up again tonight.
That said, everything around Kaden - his whole world, including his inner conflicts/resolutions - is just... incredibly realistic. I don't quite know how to explain it, but it's like you add just enough information about what's going on to clearly get your point across without actually spelling everything out.
Your description of his relationship with his shitty truck or the drywall-cubicle-thing are really good examples (I see you at least learned something from your construction job :p).
Kaden is an incredibly believable character. He's very down-to-earth in that he lives the same kind of dreary day-to-day that all of us have at least experienced once or twice before (I'm not sure if you know this, but your accounts of his courier job are so close to the real thing it's scary; it was like I was a courier all over again - ignoring the brush with organized crime, anyway >.>).
He's a likeable guy. Not arrogant, willing to lend a hand here and there, and pretty damn tenacious. His worries are very realistic; not wanting to kill people regardless of their disposition, etc. It's pretty easy to identify with him, I would have made a lot of the same decisions he did so far.
I like the way you've created his relationship with Sheets. It carries that kind of uncomfortable distance two friends who used to be really close had. I've experienced that a few times and it really sucks. Kaden's interaction with Sheets is a little less awkward, but Kaden seems to have a pretty friendly disposition - so does Sheets - so I guess that's a pretty reasonable explanation for it.
Very curious as to how his inability to harness ki properly - and that scar - turn out. I'm also very impressed on how you took an ability as... well... seemingly boring as ki sense and making it basically an integral part of your character. Kaden would be a lot less intriguing without it, so that's pretty impressive.
That said, everything around Kaden - his whole world, including his inner conflicts/resolutions - is just... incredibly realistic. I don't quite know how to explain it, but it's like you add just enough information about what's going on to clearly get your point across without actually spelling everything out.
Your description of his relationship with his shitty truck or the drywall-cubicle-thing are really good examples (I see you at least learned something from your construction job :p).
Kaden is an incredibly believable character. He's very down-to-earth in that he lives the same kind of dreary day-to-day that all of us have at least experienced once or twice before (I'm not sure if you know this, but your accounts of his courier job are so close to the real thing it's scary; it was like I was a courier all over again - ignoring the brush with organized crime, anyway >.>).
He's a likeable guy. Not arrogant, willing to lend a hand here and there, and pretty damn tenacious. His worries are very realistic; not wanting to kill people regardless of their disposition, etc. It's pretty easy to identify with him, I would have made a lot of the same decisions he did so far.
I like the way you've created his relationship with Sheets. It carries that kind of uncomfortable distance two friends who used to be really close had. I've experienced that a few times and it really sucks. Kaden's interaction with Sheets is a little less awkward, but Kaden seems to have a pretty friendly disposition - so does Sheets - so I guess that's a pretty reasonable explanation for it.
Very curious as to how his inability to harness ki properly - and that scar - turn out. I'm also very impressed on how you took an ability as... well... seemingly boring as ki sense and making it basically an integral part of your character. Kaden would be a lot less intriguing without it, so that's pretty impressive.
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