Thanks for the bio and for everything else I asked you to do. Your punctuation needs the most attention. ALWAYS read over your work to pick out mistakes. For instance in your RP, I noticed there were a few sentences that did not begin with capital letters and that beggining words were spaced out after quotation marks. There should never be any spaces between a quotation mark and the first letter of a word.
The mistakes show that you rush when writing your RP's. Take your time when writing an RP. It'll be easier to pick out errors that way.
After you've RP'd at least once in the earth forum, I highly recommend you use the following thread to ask for Comments & Criticism.
http://cdbzrpg.com/forum/forumdisplay.php?f=24
Most people don't start of as good writers so I wouldn't panic. In fact your writing is parallel to mine when I joined 4 years ago. People can vouch. You can only get better.
You're in. Welcome to chubbs. I'll update you in the roster page. Wait to be activated. If you haven't already, read the rules. If you come across anything in general you're not sure about, PM me.
The mistakes show that you rush when writing your RP's. Take your time when writing an RP. It'll be easier to pick out errors that way.
After you've RP'd at least once in the earth forum, I highly recommend you use the following thread to ask for Comments & Criticism.
http://cdbzrpg.com/forum/forumdisplay.php?f=24
Most people don't start of as good writers so I wouldn't panic. In fact your writing is parallel to mine when I joined 4 years ago. People can vouch. You can only get better.
You're in. Welcome to chubbs. I'll update you in the roster page. Wait to be activated. If you haven't already, read the rules. If you come across anything in general you're not sure about, PM me.
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