08-03-2009, 06:16 AM
This is hard...very hard.
For one, I'm learning more than I am finding things to comment on. What I like about your style of writing is the fact that I can get into Kaden's mind. I can feel his emotions and how he feels about his surroundings. Your use of outside phrases is effective as well. Don't have much more. Sorry =/
That's writing wise.
Kaden as a character:
Excellent. From the time Vad and him met face to face in Juno's saga I've liked how you handle him. I read and feel the wisdom in his thinking. Much different than how I handle Vad, which draws me in.
Eh. I feel as though this isn't enough, but I'm at a loss for words and thoughts right now. I'll add more later on.
<3
For one, I'm learning more than I am finding things to comment on. What I like about your style of writing is the fact that I can get into Kaden's mind. I can feel his emotions and how he feels about his surroundings. Your use of outside phrases is effective as well. Don't have much more. Sorry =/
That's writing wise.
Kaden as a character:
Excellent. From the time Vad and him met face to face in Juno's saga I've liked how you handle him. I read and feel the wisdom in his thinking. Much different than how I handle Vad, which draws me in.
Eh. I feel as though this isn't enough, but I'm at a loss for words and thoughts right now. I'll add more later on.
<3
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