11-09-2009, 03:53 AM
Sure, I'll bite.
5/10.
Admittedly, it was better than I thought it would be. You seem to have a pretty solid hold on the kind of character you want to go for, so that's good. The problem was that the entire post is fraught with grammatical errors (for instance, there's a run-on in your first paragraph) and typos ("girll"). I'm sure you can spell and that you know grammar, but I don't think you focus on it quite as much as you should. That goes for roleplaying and generally just chatting it up elsewhere.
Other than that, not much to say since it's basically just an intro for your character. I kind of chuckled that it only took "tournament" for Nova to sign up, but again, that's the kind of character you have. Pretty fitting, if you ask me.
HERE BE MINE: http://www.cdbzrpg.com/forum/showthread....post521068
5/10.
Admittedly, it was better than I thought it would be. You seem to have a pretty solid hold on the kind of character you want to go for, so that's good. The problem was that the entire post is fraught with grammatical errors (for instance, there's a run-on in your first paragraph) and typos ("girll"). I'm sure you can spell and that you know grammar, but I don't think you focus on it quite as much as you should. That goes for roleplaying and generally just chatting it up elsewhere.
Other than that, not much to say since it's basically just an intro for your character. I kind of chuckled that it only took "tournament" for Nova to sign up, but again, that's the kind of character you have. Pretty fitting, if you ask me.
HERE BE MINE: http://www.cdbzrpg.com/forum/showthread....post521068