04-18-2010, 06:11 AM
As promised, if not a bit delayed, for your C&C in my thread.
Well, I guess I’ll start off with the fact that you can put words together to form a coherent sentence. That’s always a plus.
No, but seriously, you have a unique narrative that is a style all your own. You have unorthodox ways of phrasing things (unfortunately no specific example comes to mind), and you mix casual speech with intellectual language, providing a nice balance between the laymen and something a little more refined. Your narrative is easily relatable and readily absorbed, which is probably one of your best qualities. A little bit of a nitpick, but something you do consistently, is once or twice in a post you will accidentally omit a required word in a sentence that gives it a little bit of a hiccup. A few other people do this, including myself, and that’s usually a result of hasty editing (if done at all).
As far as content goes, you’re definitely a minimalist when it comes to action unless a particular scene requires a lot of it. You excel at dialogue and narratives with contemplative or philosophical thought, but when it comes to something physical, you generally tend to skimp over it (in description and importance) in favor of monologue. Sometimes it works to your benefit (if you have a particularly meaningful point you’re trying to get across), and sometimes it works to your detriment (when exposition isn’t the best way to go about things). It may also simply be a vehicle of the character, in that he’s more mental and less physical.
Kaden as a character has a wide range of reactions and emotions, and has conflicting life philosophies just like everyone else, which gives him depth. He’s flexible and ambiguous, which is always highly appealing in a characterization. Kaden is very much the everyman who can be your best friend, a total asshole, or just Joe Blow sitting in a corner. The interesting thing about him is that his development and mentality is completely defined by the characters around him. He’s not so much a chameleon in the sense that he is fake, but he’s malleable in that he reacts accordingly to whomever he is with and whatever situation he’s in. You also have been forced to contend with those who challenge Kaden’s perception of himself, or at the very least, how others perceive him. This provided an interesting opportunity to see what he would do, although you seem confused as to whether it inflates his self-importance or makes him desire to change himself and how he interacts.
And yeah, I gotta say, I like our character dynamic too. Very fun, very fluid, and highly entertaining. Should be awesome.
Well, I guess I’ll start off with the fact that you can put words together to form a coherent sentence. That’s always a plus.
No, but seriously, you have a unique narrative that is a style all your own. You have unorthodox ways of phrasing things (unfortunately no specific example comes to mind), and you mix casual speech with intellectual language, providing a nice balance between the laymen and something a little more refined. Your narrative is easily relatable and readily absorbed, which is probably one of your best qualities. A little bit of a nitpick, but something you do consistently, is once or twice in a post you will accidentally omit a required word in a sentence that gives it a little bit of a hiccup. A few other people do this, including myself, and that’s usually a result of hasty editing (if done at all).
As far as content goes, you’re definitely a minimalist when it comes to action unless a particular scene requires a lot of it. You excel at dialogue and narratives with contemplative or philosophical thought, but when it comes to something physical, you generally tend to skimp over it (in description and importance) in favor of monologue. Sometimes it works to your benefit (if you have a particularly meaningful point you’re trying to get across), and sometimes it works to your detriment (when exposition isn’t the best way to go about things). It may also simply be a vehicle of the character, in that he’s more mental and less physical.
Kaden as a character has a wide range of reactions and emotions, and has conflicting life philosophies just like everyone else, which gives him depth. He’s flexible and ambiguous, which is always highly appealing in a characterization. Kaden is very much the everyman who can be your best friend, a total asshole, or just Joe Blow sitting in a corner. The interesting thing about him is that his development and mentality is completely defined by the characters around him. He’s not so much a chameleon in the sense that he is fake, but he’s malleable in that he reacts accordingly to whomever he is with and whatever situation he’s in. You also have been forced to contend with those who challenge Kaden’s perception of himself, or at the very least, how others perceive him. This provided an interesting opportunity to see what he would do, although you seem confused as to whether it inflates his self-importance or makes him desire to change himself and how he interacts.
And yeah, I gotta say, I like our character dynamic too. Very fun, very fluid, and highly entertaining. Should be awesome.
[SIGPIC][/SIGPIC]
_=So wake me when it's through
I don't want to feel the things that you do
Don't worry, I'll be fine
I just don't want this dream, wake me up inside=_
I don't want to feel the things that you do
Don't worry, I'll be fine
I just don't want this dream, wake me up inside=_