[C&C] Orion

[Victoria]

I really like how you're taking your story, revealing a bad guy from his past, and adding some plot to the your rps. I also think that you're really developing him well, you have a good way of portraying his anger and pain. I loved the part where he asked to keep his damaged eye, that was great.

Aside from that, the only thing that stuck out to me was the decline in detail, but thats just personal preference. I like a little filler in the text, be it adding some to dialogue or whatever. It seemed a little watered down at the end because of that, but regardless, the whole fight scene was awesome.

That arlian was amusing lol!