C&C Carter

[Victoria]

The one thing that sticks out to me in your writing is your typos. I do like your story, it's very interesting and I think if you keep going with it you can create a very in-depth and interesting storyline and character. I like Carter, and the whole training thing is great. This reminds me of the training I did with my own NPC, it can give you so much to work with.

Keep it up, ^^, one thing I like to do is read over my RPs before I post them. I guess even I still let a typo or two slip through.