07-11-2010, 05:07 AM
Wow, I've just got to say thanks for starts Carter! I'm really glad you enjoyed reading about him as much as I've enjoyed writing what I've done so far.
Thanks for the pointers with the independent clauses. I've got some work to do grammar-wise, although the things like "the man called Shrives..", were more me trying to convey what I imagine to be the Namekian style of speaking. "known as" seems a better substitute though. Thanks for the suggestion! I'll watch for that in the future.
You're pretty spot-on with what I wanted to do with Oahun though. I always wanted to know more about Namekians and decided to explore their culture and ideas in my writing. I like their simple way of life; how they didn't explore technology to its greatest potential even though they possess the means to do so. It was inspiring enough to make me want to join Chubbs and create a Namekian.
Like you said, I've actually planned out more for Oahun's brother than him, and most of his personal story will revolve around this somewhat cliche quest to be accepted as his equal for now. There will be twists here and there though, and I will polish out a more definite route for him in the future as I discover more about him.
The randomness ended after his first encounter with PaGa, and there is a method to the madness. Djora (another new member I'm related to), is playing out the other part of the story, and we'll be teaming up for "Its Not Easy Being Green." IMO I think after you read her stuff you'll find you already have a new favorite writer here at Chubbs. ;P
Anyways, thanks for all the praise, Its really boosted my confidence for writing more in the future! I'll be sure to return the favor soon (still working on all of Victoria's stuff! Hehe)
Thanks for the pointers with the independent clauses. I've got some work to do grammar-wise, although the things like "the man called Shrives..", were more me trying to convey what I imagine to be the Namekian style of speaking. "known as" seems a better substitute though. Thanks for the suggestion! I'll watch for that in the future.
You're pretty spot-on with what I wanted to do with Oahun though. I always wanted to know more about Namekians and decided to explore their culture and ideas in my writing. I like their simple way of life; how they didn't explore technology to its greatest potential even though they possess the means to do so. It was inspiring enough to make me want to join Chubbs and create a Namekian.
Like you said, I've actually planned out more for Oahun's brother than him, and most of his personal story will revolve around this somewhat cliche quest to be accepted as his equal for now. There will be twists here and there though, and I will polish out a more definite route for him in the future as I discover more about him.
The randomness ended after his first encounter with PaGa, and there is a method to the madness. Djora (another new member I'm related to), is playing out the other part of the story, and we'll be teaming up for "Its Not Easy Being Green." IMO I think after you read her stuff you'll find you already have a new favorite writer here at Chubbs. ;P
Anyways, thanks for all the praise, Its really boosted my confidence for writing more in the future! I'll be sure to return the favor soon (still working on all of Victoria's stuff! Hehe)
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