08-10-2010, 03:13 AM
As of lately, I'd have to say 9/10
To be honest, I found Juno an annoying character during Kill Town. It seemed as if you inserted yourself into situations and made him a little one-dimensional. Lately, though, your skill has seemed to improve.
Your writing really reminds me of something I'd read in a novel. The structure is really good, although I think I caught a run on sentence once xD. Either way, you do detail well, and you narrate pretty well too. Your intro to the saga was excellent, I read it straight through (I love heated moments like those). Keep up with that sort of skill level, and I think that you getting rid of your NPC was a good move. The more depth you give your character the better, focus on him, and show us what makes him tick.
Either way, I definetly look forward to writing with you as Cyric (it's hard to with Vic, as she's so involved with so many things).
To be honest, I found Juno an annoying character during Kill Town. It seemed as if you inserted yourself into situations and made him a little one-dimensional. Lately, though, your skill has seemed to improve.
Your writing really reminds me of something I'd read in a novel. The structure is really good, although I think I caught a run on sentence once xD. Either way, you do detail well, and you narrate pretty well too. Your intro to the saga was excellent, I read it straight through (I love heated moments like those). Keep up with that sort of skill level, and I think that you getting rid of your NPC was a good move. The more depth you give your character the better, focus on him, and show us what makes him tick.
Either way, I definetly look forward to writing with you as Cyric (it's hard to with Vic, as she's so involved with so many things).
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