03-20-2011, 05:20 AM
Both of you guys had a good grasp of each other's character, and I could feel it (Blueberry-san!).
For Belle, I think you could have easily cut out the breastses near the middle of your second post. I don't think it was needed, even if it is a part of your character.
For Aero, the parts in the brackets took me out of the story. Like Vic and Jarka said before, I think you could have easily added into the narration itself.
I'm going to vote for Aero in the end.
For Belle, I think you could have easily cut out the breastses near the middle of your second post. I don't think it was needed, even if it is a part of your character.
For Aero, the parts in the brackets took me out of the story. Like Vic and Jarka said before, I think you could have easily added into the narration itself.
I'm going to vote for Aero in the end.
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