[BT1] Belle v Aero Review

[Mal Nova]

Bah.

I haven't read any ones C&C and it did take me a moment to realize that Aero has CT.


But My C&C is thus......

Aero... You flip flopped. You changed your style from DBZ oriented to Wrestling to other things. You used the ()... brackets I believe that's what they are called... to express unneeded crap. And crap be the correct word because that is what it was.

Then there was the hole part of the 'mother fucker' thing. It didn't flow and seemed as if you were trying to hard to make your character be in a mood that you wanted him in... or something... It just didn't fit...

However, reading the other parts alot of it flowed or meshed well together and was pretty good. I'm not big on the db-esque tournament type thing on the announcments and stuff but it seemed you were trying to pull it off...



Belle... BAH! What do you really want me to say? You took the cheap way out of starting a fight. You used the time spacer to have already started it. And already had it going. It's not a bad idea... But it is cheap. Yours RP's worked but they didn't all work fully. It was as if there were some hiccups in them though... The flow wasn't constant...

You both wrote well and you both have a vocabulary I wish to try to have when I write... But... My vote goes to Belle...