03-23-2011, 01:12 AM
(This post was last modified: 03-23-2011, 01:13 AM by Sigfried Hunin.)
Shane Warnock:
I had a really really hard time understanding what was going on in your first post. It was a combination of the use of your powers and just a really vague, muddle description of what the character was experiencing. I wasn't sure if he was high or crazy or what. Apparently it was foresight, but I wasn't sure how the foresight really applied? I dunno, but it really threw me for a loop. Later in your second post, he brought back a microphone which had pretty clearly been broken in Ed's post, but I suppose that isn't like, a huge deal. I'd like to see more from your character and maybe under different circumstances I can get to know him a little better.
Edward Reynolds:
I really enjoyed these two posts. For a character that isn't really a "fighter's fighter" per se, the writing really carried him. The posts were comical, broke the 4th wall in just the right way and made me literally laugh out loud several times. he layering that's going on in the posts is pretty neat. Some of it was a bit confusing, and I think a more liberal explanation of some of the powers or events that are complicated would help a ton.
In the end I'm for Edward Reynolds. His writing was excellent and he really made his character shine.
I had a really really hard time understanding what was going on in your first post. It was a combination of the use of your powers and just a really vague, muddle description of what the character was experiencing. I wasn't sure if he was high or crazy or what. Apparently it was foresight, but I wasn't sure how the foresight really applied? I dunno, but it really threw me for a loop. Later in your second post, he brought back a microphone which had pretty clearly been broken in Ed's post, but I suppose that isn't like, a huge deal. I'd like to see more from your character and maybe under different circumstances I can get to know him a little better.
Edward Reynolds:
I really enjoyed these two posts. For a character that isn't really a "fighter's fighter" per se, the writing really carried him. The posts were comical, broke the 4th wall in just the right way and made me literally laugh out loud several times. he layering that's going on in the posts is pretty neat. Some of it was a bit confusing, and I think a more liberal explanation of some of the powers or events that are complicated would help a ton.
In the end I'm for Edward Reynolds. His writing was excellent and he really made his character shine.
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