[BT1] Shane Warnock v Edward Reynolds Resolved

[Victoria]

Shane:

Your post was slightly confusing. It made sense after I realized it was foresight, but perhaps next time more of it should be italicized. The way I read it, it felt more like you were repeating the same paragraph three times. It didn't work. Also, there were a few errors here and there, typo's and grammar mistakes. If you don't proof read, that will help. It also didn't make any sense that Edward's post had the mic break, and then you had another one. You can't time travel...and his post wasn't foresight, that would be meta gaming. Either way, it didn't work. However, I think you did a good job of trying to incorporate your characters abilities. I definitely think that if it were made less vague it would have been a lot better.

Edward:

I laughed out loud, which, probably makes me look stupid since I'm at work...lol. I love Edward. Your writing really brings out the character, you have a good way of writing your characters in a way that brings them to life. I can hear them in my head, I can see what they're doing. All I can really say is that there were some typos (which is sad, your post ended with a typo, otherwise it would have been more impacting). I think you have a good style. Some of the best writing on this site.

Although the fight was lacking in actual fighting, really, it was good. My vote goes to Edward Reynolds, his writing was just overall better.