[BT1] Alexander Trafford v Shou Resolved

[Jarka]

Alexander Trafford:
I absolutely loved the beginning of your second post. Loved, loved, loved it. Sometimes it's interesting to get a fight from outside the perspective of ACTION ACTION PUNCH TIME, and I felt like you pulled it off. I really enjoy your voice when writing as Alexander, it meshes very well with how I interpret your character. When it comes to action action punch time, you are a bit rusty, but that's what C&C is for. Unfortunately, I'm not very good at action action punch time myself, so that'll have to come from another source


Shou:
Some of your imagery is really really good, but some of it gets lost - namely that Armani jacket scene. I think I know what was going on, but I'm not 100% positive. It kind of felt like you were super high-energy writing it, and it showed in your action and dialogue. Mostly that's a good thing, but it kind of felt too hyper at points. I was sad you didn't post a second time, I looked forward to reading more.

I vote Trafford