03-23-2011, 02:53 PM
Alex
You're one of my favorite writers. You prove why every time you post. Like most of your writing, your posts in R1 were very fluent and easy to read. Your vocabulary is very refreshing, and easy to grasp even for people with lower reading-levels. Great narrating. Sometimes I feel like you lack a little in the dialog department, but I'm not sure if that's your character or simply your style. Very little grammatic and punctuation errors.
Shou
Honestly, I liked your posts. Very entertaining. You had me laughing most of the way through. However, you should take the same time you use to come up with witty remarks to indulge more into narrative description. Sometimes it felt choppy, moving from action to action without really painting the picture of how Shou got there. Some grammar and punctuations issues, but I'm not the type to knock people because of that.
Overall, this was an entertaining fight. Nice to see a serious style clash against something more casual. I have to go with Alexander Trafford in the end. It really came down to flow to me; Trafford trumped in that category.
Shou, I'd love for you to keep improving as a writer. I think you have a lot of potential with character development. I'd just like to see a little more improvement in descriptions.
You're one of my favorite writers. You prove why every time you post. Like most of your writing, your posts in R1 were very fluent and easy to read. Your vocabulary is very refreshing, and easy to grasp even for people with lower reading-levels. Great narrating. Sometimes I feel like you lack a little in the dialog department, but I'm not sure if that's your character or simply your style. Very little grammatic and punctuation errors.
Shou
Honestly, I liked your posts. Very entertaining. You had me laughing most of the way through. However, you should take the same time you use to come up with witty remarks to indulge more into narrative description. Sometimes it felt choppy, moving from action to action without really painting the picture of how Shou got there. Some grammar and punctuations issues, but I'm not the type to knock people because of that.
Overall, this was an entertaining fight. Nice to see a serious style clash against something more casual. I have to go with Alexander Trafford in the end. It really came down to flow to me; Trafford trumped in that category.
Shou, I'd love for you to keep improving as a writer. I think you have a lot of potential with character development. I'd just like to see a little more improvement in descriptions.
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