03-23-2011, 08:59 PM
Alexander Trafford: Whether you’re a bitter prince of darkness or a well-dressed street entertainer, I'm always a fan of your writing. It just seems very natural (I guess in literature terms I would say that I'm a fan of your voice? hell if I know). In terms of what happened, I found the discourse between the two interesting, but after a while, it just seemed to lose me as a reader.
Shou: You only posted once, so that doesn't help much in the overall picture. As people have stated before, your style seems very…out there ('abstract', I suppose). While I think that would be wonderful in a private story, it seems out of place on this stage. I had trouble following some parts, which always makes me a sad panda. You seemed to gloss over a lot of actual events, and that also didn't come off well for me as a reader (the best example was when he disarmed Alex of his guns. I had to re-read that to make sure I knew what happened because it seemed to be over and done so fast).
I think you both did a great job, and I would have loved to see a second post from Shou. My vote goes to Alexander Trafford. On top of writing two great posts, I give him the edge in writing a more engaging (and less confusing) bout.
Shou: You only posted once, so that doesn't help much in the overall picture. As people have stated before, your style seems very…out there ('abstract', I suppose). While I think that would be wonderful in a private story, it seems out of place on this stage. I had trouble following some parts, which always makes me a sad panda. You seemed to gloss over a lot of actual events, and that also didn't come off well for me as a reader (the best example was when he disarmed Alex of his guns. I had to re-read that to make sure I knew what happened because it seemed to be over and done so fast).
I think you both did a great job, and I would have loved to see a second post from Shou. My vote goes to Alexander Trafford. On top of writing two great posts, I give him the edge in writing a more engaging (and less confusing) bout.
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