[BT1] Shane Warnock v Edward Reynolds Resolved

[Alexander Trafford]

Shane Warnock: Great style for a DBZ, anime RPG. I'm really digging the character, but it doesn't feel as though you have complete control over him yet, which is obviously understandable. I think that this character has a lot of potential, and once you get more comfortable with him you'll be a more proficient writer than you were with Xenia (that is you, right?). I just think that this character style better fits your abilities as a writer, it just comes off with that anime, kinda action-y feel. I dig that. Mechanics and description may need some work as I was confused and had to reread sometimes.

Ed: You know I dig you as a writer. I always have. Takes me back to the ol' rivalry days when you would whip my ass. This character is almost a change of pace from the likes of Piper and A17. Your writing just seems looser and lighter. It's just as smooth and mechanically sound, which is obviously good. I dig the humor too, just good stuff all around. My only complaints would be formatting and structure. Sometimes I found myself almost reading in a sort of trance, reading then pausing at equal increments, etc. Switch it up a little bit. CATCH ME SITTING ON THAT FASTBALL AND THEN DROP A CURVE.

Vote: Edward Reynolds

Shane, if you shore up some of the mechanical, description kind of stuff, then you win this fight, in my opinion. I really, really dig your character. I mean that. Let's RP sometime.