[BT1] Orion v Victoria Review

[Aero]

Like everyone before me said: extremely hard to judge.

Orion
Good story-telling. I've never read any of your work prior to this tournament, but I already feel like I have some sense of your character. I like the fact that you integrate a lot of Orion's perception along with the narration. Like everyone above me said, however, some parts of your posts came across a little flat (I don't know if that's your character, or simply your writing). You're dialogue was relatively good. Not many grammar/punctuation issues, from my sight.

Victoria
Sometimes your strength is also your weakness. You're very good at painting a picture for the reader. However, sometimes you paint it so well that you don't allow the reader to have their own perspective. Really, description is about execution; you have to know when and when not use too much. Good dialogue as well. I couldn't really see any grammar/punctuation issues.


Honestly, I gonne vote no decision.

If I'm forced to choose between the two, then let me know and I'll try.