[BT1-QF] Orsalis v Edward Reynolds Review

[Victoria]

Well, I'll throw in a fifth to help this along.

Edward,
What can I say that I haven't already? I find your stuff hilarious, and sometimes that's a good thing. Although I feel like you may do it a BIT too much with Edward...he's that sort of character. I want to say that you made him to be comical, and without that, he just wouldn't be Edward. I couldn't find anything really critical to comment on. All I know is that I want to know more about the character.

Orsalis,
I love your writing, you know that. The thing is, I just found that it paled in comparison against Edward. I've never been a huge fan of putting "lol" in any way in a RP, but I understand you were trying to keep up with the way Edward's character is. I found some of your sentences a little redundant, or out of place. Your narrative is good (I'd say that's your strength, pushing a story), but some of your structure could use work.

My vote goes to Edward.