05-16-2011, 03:08 AM
OK... lets see what I can do here...
Big-O: Your first post,, well... it was descriptive, but better then the last one I read of yours, in my own opinion and easier to follow. The beginning piqued my interest though im not sure why. The whole smoke and dire and glass breaking, just reminded me of Stone Cold and I actually thought Orsalis was going to come out strutting like him. That really would have been fucking hilarious. But you did your own thing and it got my interest.
AlleyKat: Ok. I was never a fan of the near end of the dark Days of Mino, and for somereason at the beginning of your first post, it felt like that was what I was reading. IT leveled out quickly and you made it your own, and in my honest opinion you and Ors were near equal quality in the descriptive parts.
Big-O:Your second post was just as detailed and descrptive as the first and easy enough to read. There were a few errors but they were easy enough to see whqat you meant to say in the first place. near the end I especially liked the bit of getting into Ors mind and train of thought and tihnk you should have done that more so as you did there. You know... the part right before Alex says 'Hey' and snaps him out of it
AlleyKat: Your second post was for better and more entertaining then your first in my opinion. It felt more like Alex, I guess.
Now... I think both of you tried to put more of your 'character' into the fights before, but I really didn't feel like that what you tried to do here. I'm talking about depth and definition. The 'why', I guess. And I say that knowing that I am a fan of the story.
I said I wasn't going to read and vote because I felt I would be biased, even if I tried not to be. I felt that whoever won out of Belle and Alex would ahve been the winner no matter what.
That being said...
I Vote Orsalis. Alex, you really didnt do as well as i thought you would. Especially on the first post.
Big-O: Your first post,, well... it was descriptive, but better then the last one I read of yours, in my own opinion and easier to follow. The beginning piqued my interest though im not sure why. The whole smoke and dire and glass breaking, just reminded me of Stone Cold and I actually thought Orsalis was going to come out strutting like him. That really would have been fucking hilarious. But you did your own thing and it got my interest.
AlleyKat: Ok. I was never a fan of the near end of the dark Days of Mino, and for somereason at the beginning of your first post, it felt like that was what I was reading. IT leveled out quickly and you made it your own, and in my honest opinion you and Ors were near equal quality in the descriptive parts.
Big-O:Your second post was just as detailed and descrptive as the first and easy enough to read. There were a few errors but they were easy enough to see whqat you meant to say in the first place. near the end I especially liked the bit of getting into Ors mind and train of thought and tihnk you should have done that more so as you did there. You know... the part right before Alex says 'Hey' and snaps him out of it
AlleyKat: Your second post was for better and more entertaining then your first in my opinion. It felt more like Alex, I guess.
Now... I think both of you tried to put more of your 'character' into the fights before, but I really didn't feel like that what you tried to do here. I'm talking about depth and definition. The 'why', I guess. And I say that knowing that I am a fan of the story.
I said I wasn't going to read and vote because I felt I would be biased, even if I tried not to be. I felt that whoever won out of Belle and Alex would ahve been the winner no matter what.
That being said...
I Vote Orsalis. Alex, you really didnt do as well as i thought you would. Especially on the first post.
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Reb: ya know
Reb: I think you're a fucking moron OOC
Reb: but I have to hand it to you
Reb: you've become a really great writer