Gokon

[Victoria]

Hi there, Gokon.

There's a few problems with your application. If you haven't read our joining information thread, you should do that now. Here is the link: Joining Rules.

First of all, your description of your character. Instead of saying "goku's hair, tail like gohan" actually describe your character.

"He has a tail, which normally resides wrapped around his waist. Gokon's hair is long, and pointed upward in a jagged jet black style. There is also a red bandanna wrapped around his brow, keeping stray hair out of his eyes."

Picture the character in your mind, and describe him for us.

Your starting abilities should be TWO abilities from our list here. So things like Healing, or Dark Ki. Stuff like "Kamehameha" would be custom techniques which you can apply for and purchase once you're approved.

Your RP sample is something that will need to be worked on. We require 300 words, and that sample you gave us was substantially smaller than our required amount.

The major issue is that your sample was one big run-on sentence. I HIGHLY suggest using Microsoft Word, and brushing up on your grammar/writing before you resubmit. We aren't too strict here, but we have some standards. Right now you have to put in some work on your writing.

At this time we will have to reject your application. Feel free to try again once you've worked on the problems I've outlined .

Have a great day.