01-20-2008, 06:31 AM
Content is good. Minor grammatical errors, but those can be fixed with practice. It would be awesome if you broke your dialogue into separate paragraphs. Those huge chunks make it hard to differentiate who is talking.
You also need to pick five starting moves and how you want your starting stats distributed. You can make a character vault when you're ready. Just post in the Updates forum.
Other than that, you're good to go. Welcome to Chubbs.
You also need to pick five starting moves and how you want your starting stats distributed. You can make a character vault when you're ready. Just post in the Updates forum.
Other than that, you're good to go. Welcome to Chubbs.
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Pass you by, good-bye to you=_
Pass you by, good-bye to you=_