CnC game

[Minoshia]

This was a short, simple and pretty well written post i'd say. At some points the description was lacking the vigour im generally used to, but that could just be a difference in styles. I had to use my imagination a bit to picture exactly what was happening, as opposed to say... rad, when i can see everything without having to assume whatsoever. The dialogue was generally good, but bits and pieces of it seemed a bit forced. The whole gokua thing kinda caught me off-guard, but that was due to lack of knowledge... and i was a bit surprised by Aero's non-reaction to you speaking aloud to someone who wasn't there, but that could also be attributed to lack of knowledge (maybe Aero knows you talk to invisible people lol). Overall i though this was an excellent development post between your charachter and Aero, and i thought you nailed pretty much everything. Nice work, keep it up. you've improved ALOT since i went absent awhile back.

http://www.cdbzrpg.com/forum/showthread....post460729