Personal Saga

[Sage]

Bebi, your saga's nice. Don't take this the wrong way, but you've got room for improvement. On the plus side, I believe you have the potential to improve, and become a powerhouse RPer, just work on the more difficult parts. Description and character development is always harder than action or plot development. At least for me, anyway.

Cell, damn. I absolutely love the way you're portraying your character. The supremist attitude is delivered perfectly. Your writing style is very refreshing and engaging. Simply put, keep up the good work.
(Perhaps next time you should start a new thread for criticism of your own saga, simply to keep things more organized, and, it's just being considerate to Bebi =\)