writing

[Hellfighter 17]

I'm actually surpised you wrote something and posted it on Chubbs, that you didn't need to. Whatever, though.

Normally, when I read first person, I get caught up in the fact that it is first person, but I think the abstract kept it real for me, and gave it flow. A sentence or two would have me confused every now and then, but I think I got the general feel for it.

Originally posted by Koola
Every man's true goal is to obtain this feeling of origin. To be one with the air that was the first breath, and the memories we should have never thrown away. I took a flame to my last picture of us. Sentiment is tantamount to an anchor. Tie my emotions down to this place I could never leave behind. The city gates and concrete walls. Broken glass, the constituent of a baby's first window.

I prefer this paragraph over all the others. I'm not sur eif it's ecause I agree iwth it, or because I feel the same way, or both, but I think it helps bring it all together.

Nice job, man.