05-17-2006, 04:36 AM
I haven't read the spar post yet, Olibu.
Retane:
I loved it. You've come so far from when you first joined a couple years ago, it's a shame you keep having to start with new characters. Great writing, good length, and an excellent character.
Bujin:
My only gripe was you bringing in things about Bujin's past, out of nowhere. It's like you could have been talking about candy and then we go into nuclear fission. You have to bring things like out real subtly.
Besides that, good job.
Hasky:
Excellent job.
Retane:
I loved it. You've come so far from when you first joined a couple years ago, it's a shame you keep having to start with new characters. Great writing, good length, and an excellent character.
Bujin:
My only gripe was you bringing in things about Bujin's past, out of nowhere. It's like you could have been talking about candy and then we go into nuclear fission. You have to bring things like out real subtly.
Besides that, good job.
Hasky:
Excellent job.